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Hi Bill, thanks for the feedback! Good tip on slowing down to savor those ingredients, which I really do like! Thanks for listening!
Mary
Thanks for the feedback DKosoy! I’m glad it sounds improved. Yes, I am working to get rid of unwanted background noises, new setup is going to get dialed in, in the next few days (new equipment)! I think I took out the pause between large and one topping in an attempt to speed things up. Thanks for listening and the tips!
Mary
Hi Jason, good work! I liked the phrasing for all of the lines except for “…moment of stillness” and “…needs to be done”. The rest of the lines ended in a lower tone, but those two not as much (they kindof lilted up at the ends); just felt like all of the lines / commands should end with a downward tone to keep the relaxed vibe of the entire script. Good work on this one!
Mary
Hi Katelyn! Good reads! Both are very clear and straightforward, with good pacing and emphasis on key words to help listener understanding. The first one comes across as more factual and the second is a bit more conversational as you intended, really good!
Mary
Hi CptAmerica757! I like both reads and how you varied it up for each of them. I’m not fully setup to give feedback on recording quality, but the tone and pacing and clarity of the reads were very good and your voice is good for both genres. I feel like the second read for “We All Belong” sounded more authentic for you. Good job!
Mary
Hi Bill, really nice work! Both of them sound really good. You have a nice clean, warm voice that is perfect for this genre. Definitely not overblown, it sounds very commanding and confident. Keep up the great work!
Mary
Hi everyone! I re-did this one from a few days ago, hopefully improving this time. I put the old one in there also, which is longer and has a lead-in. Notes were to speed it up, work on the uptalk and improve on the pauses and word emphasis choices. Let me know if it sounds improved to you, or not. Be picky!! Thanks as always for listening and offering feedback!! It is very helpful.
Mary
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Hi Chas, thanks for the feedback! Lead-ins always help me get to the intended idea / mood faster, so that’s good to hear. I will try again without “then” emphasized – not sure why that happened, actually. I will work on less uptalk and a quicker pace for this one and see where it goes, and also less on the pauses. Thanks again!
Mary
Hi Mitch, thanks for the feedback! I will try it faster and see how it goes with that. Pizza commercials do tend to be fast for whatever reason 🙂 Thanks!
Mary
