[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Robert! Definitely working on the conversational part of things. Thanks,

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Bill, thanks for the feedback! Yes, I did hit a few words harder than typical, so that makes sense to lighten that up. I’ll try it again with a more natural, relaxed tone and see how it goes. Thanks for the tips!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Mitch! I will work on the pace for this one and taking the stiffness out. Thanks for the tips and listening!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi KBridges! I’m not hearing anything on this recording? Can you try uploading again please? I tried it a couple of times and maxed out the volume but did not hear anything.

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi KBridges, great work! The only critique I would give is for the 2 sets of lists to be differentiated a bit more to help them stand out. The first list could build up from the first to last item – “it tastes good, and it’s fun to eat, but it also gives us energy!” The second list of 5 items (grow, play, dance, run, study, and think) almost all had the same tone except for think. It’s good, just a touch more variation would make it even better. Good job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi KBridges, very nice! Your voice is really great for this genre. It sounds very friendly and welcoming. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi KBridges! This was a good read. I liked the pacing and the emphasis and pauses throughout. It felt like there may need to be just a tiny more of a pause after “stylistic decisions,…” to prepare the listener for what you are about to tell them, just my opinion on that. Good job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Sarah, good read! The energy was really great and it was very friendly. I agree that the first 2 words “An Everypaw” ran together, I would suggest really emphasizing “Everypaw” here because it’s a weird unusual word to begin with, and you want the listener to know what you are talking about pretty quickly. You can then emphasize “Everypaw” again at the end of the script to make it stand out and understand what the product / service is that you are talking about. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Steve! Great job on this read! Very conversational while still being educational, pleasant and welcoming. Your voice is very well-suited for this genre. I really don’t have much to critique here. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Bil-Bo, really nice! Again, good production with the music. I like the character voices and the lightness of the script, it was really fun to hear. Good job!

Mary

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