[mkell755]

Hi Svenbot! I like your energy and enthusiasm on this one. Very clear and with good pacing too. I like how you really emphasized the first Trendi to make the brand really stand out. good job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Michelle – I think that may have been a different version of the recording right before it? It sounded even a little faster than the one I just commented on, so my comments are similar in that I would recommend slowing it down just a bit and let the questions hang in the air for a tiny bit longer. I did hear some background noises on this one that I did not hear on the other one too. I’m not fully set up yet with my studio, just something I noticed. Keep it up!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Michelle, welcome!

I like your tone and nice soothing quality of your voice, very nice! It was really good for this script. I agree too that you could slow down the pace just a bit to pose the strong questions and give the listener a beat to catch up and think about “who would you be” for example. Good work!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Rogue1, thanks for your feedback! More aspirational feel, got it and that totally makes sense. Thanks again!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Tina! Good points there, as it feels like a call to action to me as well. I really like the Duluth attitude about living life to the fullest and striving for betterment in general. I will try it again with more edge / energy. Thanks, that was helpful.

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Katelyn, thanks for the feedback! I’m glad one the quicker one sounded more natural. I struggle with saying “to” in stead of chopping it off like “ta” or “t” – I definitley nede to work on that. Thanks again!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback MLanham! Less serious seems to be easier for me, so I’m glad it sounded better. Thanks!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi everyone! here are 2 takes on the same script for any and all feedback. Just started experimenting with Audacity as a beginner. Let me know what you think. Thank you!
P.S. – The first recording is much quieter than the second, just a notice to turn the second one down a notch before listening.

Mary

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[mkell755]

Hi Hulykulani! Good job on these 3 scripts – good pacing and energy for all of them, and good emphasis on key words.
On Script 2 the tone raised at the end of the sentence as if a question instead of a period on “With big corn flakes and crunchy bunches of oats.” Minor thing. Good job here!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Kevin, Good work! I like the pacing, clarity and varied emphasis on key words throughout the script. It is informative and pleasant. Good job on this!

Mary

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