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Hi Kevin, welcome!
I like your tone, pacing and clarity. You did a good job of emphasizing the product / brand and the energy level was good. It sounded nice and conversational. Good job!
Mary
Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Working on lead-ins to help with getting into the proper mood and sounding concerned but conversational on this one. Let me know if those points were hit, or any other feedback. Thank you!
Mary
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Thanks for the feedback Official81! I’m glad it came across as casual and conversational, and I will work on the speed. Thanks!
Mary
Hi Amber, really nice read! You have such a nice, warm tone and it sounds really good for this genre. It feels very authentic for Burt’s Bees. Good job!
Mary
Hi Katelyn, great job! I prefer the first read more, you sound more authentic to really enjoying the beach and I could picture the beach as well as feel the smile in your voice – really well done! The second read was good as well, so it may just be a personal preference.
Mary
Hi Dmendoza, welcome!
I like the tone and pacing of this script for you. It sounded more like it was something you were reading than telling someone about (something I’m working on myself). In the second sentence it sounded more like a question “…for the entire family to enjoy?” vs. “…for the entire family to enjoy.” I agree too that there should be more emphasis on “you make it work” as a final statement for telling someone why they should go to California State Parks. Good job!Mary
Hi SuperLuke! Nice! I like your character voice, and it works really well for this poem. I like the tone variation throughout. I’m not fully set up yet to give much feedback on recording quality. “He woke with a fright…” sounded like “He woke wid a fright…” to me, so working on clearer enunciation is my feedback (from what I’m hearing). Keep it up!
Mary
Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Working on lead-ins and attempting to sound casual and conversational. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
Balance Bar
Running for a train…or training for a run…
Find your Balance. Every delicious Balance Bar gives you the perfect 40-30-30 ratio of carbs, protein, and dietary fat……for energy that lasts. Balance Bar. Have you found your Balance?Hi Brian, thanks for the feedback. In an effort to be conversational and not speaking too slowly as if talking with a friend who bikes, the clarity was lost, so I will work on that. This was meant to be a casual read to a friend, but like you say sounded a little too rehearsed / unnatural at the end. I have been picturing who I’m talking to when I record (as per my coach) but still have work to do on that end. Thanks again!
Mary
