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Hi Chas! I like the energy and enthusiasm here, good job! Definitely happy-sounding 🙂 I agree with Toque that as an alternate take, maybe a fun character voice could be used for the first part of the script as the dog speaking. Think of a happy-go-lucky dog just being a really happy goofy dog, maybe even throw in some panting after “best day ever!” It sounds upbeat and good as is, so this is just a suggestion. My coach tells me often that it is easier to dial it down vs. dial it up, so I totally understand not wanting to sound too over the top. Good work!
Mary
Hi Dante! Very good for all 3 scripts! I really like your nice warm, deep tone. It sounds really well suited for these. You have good pacing, enunciation, energy and flow throughout all 3 – really good work!
Mary
Hi Kbridges, good read! It sounded very appropriate for elearning to a young audience. I liked the pace and tone throughout. Your voice has a calm and friendly tone to it. I would say that the first “don’t” sounded more like “don’t?” as your voice raised at the end like a question (uptalk). I do this a lot and it is a hard habit to break. Overall very good!
Mary
Hi Kbridges! Very nice! I like the tone of your voice and you have a nice warm, calm approach that is good for this genre. You might try preforming the first 3 sentences of the script with a little more energy – that’s the part where you are REALLY excited about teaching someone how to paraglide! Just more enthusiasm in general. After the first part of the script, it then settles down a little into the teaching part, and your tone there seemed appropriate. Good job!
Mary
Hi Adebenedicts! Both recordings were really quiet on my end, I had to turn it to the max (100) and it was still very quiet and hard to hear completely. For the first script, it sounded pretty monotone to me, I realize it is a narration, but it did not have a lot of variation in tone. The second sounded much better to me – you sounded more authentic and invested in the script as told to others. Pacing was good for both scripts. Keep it up!
Mary
Hi everyone! Here is a script for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think! Thanks,
Mary
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Mary
Thanks for the feedback Chas! The script seemed to call for quirky, so I’m glad it came across that way. I struggled with the third sentence a little – it was so long, so I was working to to make it flow a little better and varying the tone every which way to help with that. Thanks for all the detailed comments, very helpful!
Mary
Thanks for the feedback Toque! I have to admit the first 2 sentences were the most fun! I will work on keeping the rest of the script conversational too. Thanks!
Mary
Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Working on sounding conversational and authentic. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
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