[mkell755]

Hi Katelyn! Good job! Both sounded good to me, but I too agree that #2 is better by just a little bit. It sounded authentic in telling someone about TS in an engaged and sincere way. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Monibr16, very good! Nice warm tone and I could tell you had a smile in your voice. I like the calmness in your voice and the unhurried pace. Since “recycle” is repeated 5 times, you might try it with a little more variation in tone for each of those 5 times; each phrase essentially acts like one item in a list. Very nice, and I now would like a Nespresso!!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Bil-Bo – excellent work! both in the delivery and production for all 3 scripts. I don’t have my studio set up yet, but the third script sounded a little less “crystal clear” than the other 2 scripts did. All of them have great pacing and enunciation and sound very authentic for your voice. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Rogue1, sounds great! The second script sounds fast but clear, and with more tone variation than the first read, which is good for this script. I too heard “ta turtle up” as opposed to “to turtle up”, which is something that trips me up quite often as well. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Working on sounding conversational and authentic. Thanks for listening!

Mary

Third Shift Beer
Third Shift is not just a beer, it’s a story.
A story about loving what you do.
They say when you love your job you never work a day in your life.
You never work a night either.
That’s what brought the band of brewers together to make a beer they’re proud to call their own.
Introducing the gold-medal-winning Third Shift Amber Lager.
When beer is your calling you never clock out.

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[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Monibr16! I’m glad it came across as personable, and I will work on picking it up a bit – thanks!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Katelyn! I tried several times on the first question to make it sound genuine, so I’m glad it came across that way. I will work on picking up the pace too and see how it goes. Thanks again!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback John! Glad that it is sounding conversational and natural! Thanks again,

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Tom! Very nice! Great clarity and warmth in your voice, and good varied tone throughout. Good sound quality as well. Your voice is well-suited for this type of commercial Good job!

[mkell755]

Hi Katelyn, really good reads! I think the first read was a little more upbeat and conversational by a tiny bit, and I could hear the encouragement in your voice. Very clear and friendly tone as always. Very nice!

Mary

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