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Hi Rogue1, Thanks for the feedback! That totally makes sense about the shift in energy at the “so brace yourself”, I will work on varying it up there. Yes and doing fun scripts too helps me work on the energy levels. Thanks again!
Mary
Hi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! Yes now that I am hearing it again it does sound a little slow.
There is not much to suggest the commercial is for a Glock G44 gun, but that’s what it was for. I agree that the words could have been for a variety of outdoor products like an RV! It reminded me of those Levi’s ads that I have seen over the years that have almost no mention of jeans or jean jackets, but you finally know in the final scene by them showing you one Levi label for a split second. This one was like that too, only it had one target practice shot and one more quick glace at the gun in someone’s hands. Ahhh – advertising! 🙂 Thanks!
Mary
Hi Svenbot, nice job! I liked the character voice, the pacing and enunciation throughout. Really good! I like all the variety in the voices I have heard from you. Keep it up!
Mary
Hi Tim, good job! I liked the confidence and pacing of this script, and the emphasis on several words throughout and the variation in tone. I don’t have my studio set up yet, but it sounds good to me. Keep it up!
Mary
Hi HulyK! Good reads! I think you had great energy for all 3, good enunciation, and good emphasis of words and phrases. I too hear an echo in the background, but am myself not fully soundproofed yet. I heard just a slight uptalk for script 2 at “…turkey on the grill.” (I have a tendency to uptalk too and it is hard to get rid of for me!). For script 3 you might try it with a little more smile in your voice to accent the humor, it sounded a little firm / harsh to my ear. Really good for all 3, keep it up!
Mary
Hi JensenJackobs! Good read! Very calm and clear and reassuring in tone for that is well-suited for this genre. I agree that the “AND” might need to be emphasized more. Very good!
Mary
Hi Lmayo! Good reads! Your voice is nice, warm, smooth and relaxed. I like how you varied it up for the meditation vs. diabetes and the other scripts. I’m not fully set up yet in my home studio, but it sounded nice and clear from what I can hear. Very good!
Mary
Hi Chas! These scripts sound good to me. Your pacing, enunciation, and variation in tone sounds appropriate for both of them. I think the genre suits you. Keep it up!
Mary
Hi Eelalanee! Those were great! I can really hear the smile in your voice and I like the tone, enunciation and enthusiasm for both scripts. The pacing felt good for this genre.
The first script sounded really good on pacing – you made the statements and let the kids catch up with the instructions.
For the second script I heard a pause after “Today” (first word), but there was no comma. It also ended sounding like a question “…other places as well?” as the tone raised at the end, as opposed to sounding like a sentence. (I do this too). I really liked the extra enthusiasm starting with “..what we would do to have fun!” through the end of the script. I too liked the “…let’s blast off!” It sounded very kid friendly. Really good job, keep it up!Mary
Hello all! Here is a recording (done on my phone) for any and all feedback. Does it sound conversational? Enough energy and good enunciation? Let me know what you think. Thank you!
Mary
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