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July 1, 2021 at 5:53 pm #69095
mike_levelton
ParticipantHey everyone,
I have some more scripts I’d love for you to review.
Any advice is always greatly appreciated.
Thanks!
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July 1, 2021 at 7:14 pm #69101
ElcysVoice
ParticipantYou have some great energy “you can trust a New Yorker” that comes through I’d love to hear it come through throughout the entire recording.
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July 2, 2021 at 9:55 pm #69116
Official81
ParticipantHi Mike!
Your voice is nice and clear and crisp. You may want to try using more fluctuations and intonations in the Lender’s Bagel read. ANd in the Asthma read you sound great there are a few glottals and pauses that can easily be edited out. And correcting those glottals will help you sound more conversational.
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July 1, 2021 at 6:19 pm #69098
Official81
ParticipantHello everyone I am looking for some feedback on my editing in this recording. Please let me know how I did.
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July 2, 2021 at 9:49 pm #69113
Official81
ParticipantHello again all. I am back and this time I thought it would be a great idea to let you all listen to the unedited version and the edited version for feedback on sound quality and how I did on editing the vocals.
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July 5, 2021 at 9:08 pm #69168
mkell755
ParticipantHi Official81, good job! I liked the edited version better, good job on the editing! It just sounded clearer and easier to understand. The pacing and enunciation was good and you had a nice natural delivery. Very good!
Mary
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July 6, 2021 at 9:41 am #69178
Official81
ParticipantThank you so much for your feedback!
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July 3, 2021 at 1:38 pm #69122
d_tonguet
ParticipantI would love some feedback on this one. I’m working on sounding conversational rather than presentational, so let me know what you think!
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July 5, 2021 at 12:40 pm #69135
JLoz19
ParticipantHello there!
I really enjoyed your conversational style in this voice over. It sounded natural and held my attention. The only things I noticed were a few things that could be edited out easily, such as when taking breaths and any mouth noises that may happen in between the lines you speak. Otherwise, it was an awesome job doing conversational rather than presentational! I especially liked the part, “there’s more time for the good stuff.”
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July 5, 2021 at 9:04 pm #69166
mkell755
ParticipantHi D_tonguet, good job! I too like your conversational style on this one, it had a nice energy to it and felt very approachable and natural for this script. Good variation in tone as well. Keep it up!
Mary
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July 5, 2021 at 12:28 pm #69134
JLoz19
ParticipantHey All!
I’m new to this forum and to voice over, so I thought I’d stop by to say “hi” and also drop a few real estate commercial scripts I’ve tried out in my garage studio. I appreciate your feedback, and it’s so cool to hear others’ voice overs here – you all are doing so well!
Thanks a bunch!
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July 5, 2021 at 12:41 pm #69136
JLoz19
ParticipantHey All!
I’m new to this forum and to voice over, so I thought I’d stop by to say “hi” and also drop a few real estate commercial scripts I’ve tried out in my garage studio. I appreciate your feedback, and it’s so cool to hear others’ voice overs here – you all are doing so well!
Thanks a bunch!
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July 5, 2021 at 9:02 pm #69165
mkell755
ParticipantHi Jen, really nice! You are a natural and your voice is well-suited for these genres. I like the recording production too. You have a very clear and confident sound which is great for real estate. I likes your delivery of the last sentence in the first recording “How’s this weekend for you?”, really kept my attention throughout. Great job!
Mary
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July 5, 2021 at 1:52 pm #69144
EdSoliz
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July 5, 2021 at 8:55 pm #69164
mkell755
ParticipantHi Ed, good job! Very clear and well-paced throughout. I liked all 3 of these for you with USPS bring my favorite. I think you could slow down Jack Daniels a little and really lean into what is being said. It sounded like the words were a little smushed together in “We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion…” I’d like to hear this one again, and I give you permission to act it out this time, like you are actually chatting with a neighbor in the middle of the road, like you have all day to talk about the weather! Good work!
Mary
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July 6, 2021 at 3:34 pm #69192
EdSoliz
ParticipantThank you for the feedback! Speed is something that I’m struggling with a little as I have a tendency to talk and read fast. This is going to sound odd, but I worry so much about going too fast that it feels like I’m losing something in the read, though that is likely a case of overthinking things. In any event here’s a second take where I’m trying to go a little slower than the first one. Thanks again!
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July 6, 2021 at 9:39 pm #69200
mkell755
ParticipantHi Ed, you are welcome for the feedback. Good job on the second take! I could tell you slowed it down some in the first half, but then it sped up again a little on the last sentence. The pauses were good, it makes it interesting to listen to, like what’s coming next? Give the listener a little time to hang on your last words. “slow, deliberate fashion” could be even further stretched out and emphasized. Unlike the US Postal Service script (people want their mail delivered really fast!) you are describing a process by which whiskey is made, and so people will assume that taking a long time to cure the whiskey is a good thing, like it indicates quality. I noticed that both of your recordings were 26 seconds long, you might even try it with the goal of having the recording last 30 seconds, which is a typical commercial script length. I too speak too fast sometimes, like I need to deliver the message and be efficient, so this is not uncommon to have to work on the speed of a particular script. Thanks for trying again! Mary
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July 5, 2021 at 2:04 pm #69148
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHey everyone, I had an idea regarding my recording setup and put it to the test. What do you think of these two samples? The first one features my usual recording setup with the detachable roof, while the second one features me recording with the roof more elevated. Which do you think sounds better? Any advice on my performance is appreciated too. Thanks.
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July 5, 2021 at 5:10 pm #69151
Bev
ParticipantHi Official81,
I am no editor but I did listen to both your edited and unedited versions, I actually liked the unedited, again it’s just me, but I found the edited version sharp sounding.-
July 5, 2021 at 5:17 pm #69153
Official81
ParticipantThank you Bev I will take that into account.
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July 5, 2021 at 5:25 pm #69156
Bev
ParticipantLooking for feedback. I didn’t provide the scripts for the last two.
A Haunting Title
In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the things we see and the things we fear, there are doors.
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July 5, 2021 at 8:44 pm #69162
mkell755
ParticipantHi Bev, very nice! I really like the texture in your voice – so rich and interesting! I liked all 3 scripts, and I think you were the most believable and dramatic in the first one “A Haunting Title”. I’m hearing a little bit of background noise like paper rustling but overall it’s very good!
Mary
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July 6, 2021 at 9:45 am #69179
Official81
ParticipantI love your voice! I agree with Mary you sound awesome there was some type of noise in the background that could be easily edited out.
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