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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound.

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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 2)

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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 3)

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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 4)

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[RCampos]

Hi Silver Wit,
I like what you’re doing in version 2, but overall, I prefer version 1 because it’s cleaner and clearer. Version 2 gives me a sense that you’re acting out the headache, and this thought distracts me a bit from your words. I like how you vary the intonation on: throbbing, tension and pain – but I think a more upbeat ending might help. I would appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!

[Declan Waters]

I really like how well you differentiate between the two attitudes that you’re going for. I think blending the two moods to some extent would make for a very convincing read. At first defeated by the pain, but then convicted and confident about the solution that Excedrin provides. Well done

[RCampos]

Hi Everybody!
I would really appreciate your feedback on this read. I’m working on a conversational read while still honoring the “smooth coolness” of a jazz radio station.

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[Declan Waters]

I think your voice and the tone you chose matches the script very well. One critique – It sounds to me as if you end most sentences the same way. Shooting for differentiation particularly at the end of your sentences would help to pace the read and keep listeners engaged. I hope you find this helpful

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for your note about how I end sentences. I’ll pay more attention to that. All the best!

[Tates-VO]

It sounds very cool nice tone in the voice.

[Silver Wit]

You’ve certainly got the voice for “cool jazz.” Reminds me of the hosts of some jazz stations in New York.

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for the feedback!
All the best,
R

[cbehrens]

I think your overall read aligns with a conversational feeling; I appreciate your inflection on the word “grooviest”! One thing just to keep in mind may be to play with saying repetitive words like “cool” in different ways, offering more variation. Great job!

[Unity]

Hi. The attached file was downloaded as a homework assignment. Feedback would be most appreciated. Thanks so much for your time.

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[RCampos]

Hi Unity,
I think your voice and delivery bring a gravitas and seriousness – which are both essential to this issue. I just have a couple of small notes:
1. At the very beginning, I don’t hear the “s” in “As a parent…”
2. I think you could give more emphasis to “Autism Speaks” and the “Ad Council” at the end, since presumably they’re paying for this ad and want to be clearly identified.
But other than that, nice conversational tone and effective delivery.
If you have a moment, I would greatly appreciate a comment on my Costa Rica VO, posted 10-27 at 7:57pm. I also have a Cool Jazz VO – posted on 10-25. Thank you!

[phillipjlee]

Hello everyone,

I am practicing on my narration voiceover for homework. I would greatly like feedback. Recorded on phone, please excuse the low quality.

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[ShellyMadison]

Great pace and you have a lovely, full tone to your voice. I recommend marking up a script to give emphasis to important phrases and really honing in on an audience in your mind. You vary your pitch, but otherwise each word seems to have the same weight so it is sounding a bit robotic.

[Tates-VO]

Very nice vocals and the pace is nice and slow good job

[Hazaro]

Still working on focusing on my attitude in my reads. Hope they’re coming through clearly.

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[Silver Wit]

Very nice difference between both reads. Subtle, but I could hear the difference.

[Hazaro]

And last one before a session on attitude focus. Realize the sound got a bit muffled in the second one, construction all of a sudden was happening and bummed that I couldn’t rehearse for a bit longer.

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[ShellyMadison]

Can definitely hear the difference between these two. Well done 🙂

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi voiceover friends! I would love any feedback excluding production value as my home studio is not yet up and running, on this record. I’m specifically working on conversational tone and illuminating glottal stops. Thanks in advance for your thoughts.

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[RCampos]

Hi Nikka,
I think you nailed the conversational tone on JIF. Very nice! A few small critiques:
1. At the very top, I think you rushed “My kids” just a touch, so that it gets buried. I think those words could use a little more emphasis.
2. “the” in the three leading brands gets muffled. This might get taken care of with a more sophisticated audio setup, but I do hear you drop your tone on that word, and the first time I listened I wasn’t sure it was a “the”.
3. At the end, JIF Peanut Butter – maybe try going up in intonation rather than down. After your great read, the VO seems to peter out.
Those are all small tweaks. Overall your read sounds very natural and conversational.
I would welcome your feedback on my Costa Rica VO, posted 10-27 at 7:57 EST. Thank you!

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