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[Donnamichelle444]

that sounds like some good advice – thanks for sharing

[TimberTykes]

Good Evening, everyone!

Working on a good night’s practice, per my instructor. My main focus lies on diction and glottal stops, with words ending in ‘-st,’ ‘-ts,’ ‘xt,’ etc., like ‘rest.’

Other than that, I’m also looking to make sure I’ve given the brand in question enough emphasis, and that I keep an overall constant energy, with a beginning/middle/end.

Any feedback and criticisms of any kind is much appreciated. Thank you for your time.

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[madtrammell]

Great job! My only advice would be to slow your pace just a tad bit, even though its a shorter read try to take your time with it

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi everyone! I’m looking for feedback on this reading please. It’s a spot about a Bob Ross documentary. How can you say two words like “Bob Ross” together without sounding choppy? How does the rest sound? Do you think I hit the right words? Thank you for any feedback you all can provide. Also, home studio not set up yet please don’t comment on production quality

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[RCampos]

I enjoy this read and you grabbed my interest in someone I knew nothing about!

[RonBroach]

I didn’t notice “Bob Ross” sounding choppy. I think you did great with the pronunciation. There were a couple of places where I felt like I was hanging – waiting for the next word – perhaps the script had a comma, but the actual conversation wouldn’t have had that much of a pause. However, this is subjective to my preference and someone else may like the time spacing. The only other thing that caught my attention is some harsh high frequencies, especially on s consonants.

[Kamasch]

Beginner here – after one coaching session, I’ve been focusing on sounding conversational and connected; will accept any sort of feedback. I’m aware there’s some background noise/subpar audio, but this is just practice for now! Thanks!

[Kamasch]

replying on my own thread since it wouldn’t let me edit – had some upload issues

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[RCampos]

I think you are spot on in the delivery for Betterhelp. You capture the tone and the seriousness of the issue. You sound very conversational in all the above. I do think Pillsbury could be a touch more upbeat.

[Silver Wit]

I could really feel the emotion for your Betterhelp read. though I think you should speak a little louder on your Pillsbury read or get a little closer to your mic.

[RCampos]

Hi Everyone,
Would love your feedback on my pace and tone in this first VO, recorded on my cell phone.

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[raven808]

Nice touch adding music and your voice is very well suited for this genre! I felt like you could put a little more emotion or change your intonation for some of the words to keep the engagement (i.e.”he wasn’t fond of rules or having respect for the status quo”).

[RCampos]

Thanks so much for the helpful notes! I’ll work on the emotion / engagement. Appreciate your feedback.

[twstark]

Hi gang – couple new reads from me in the commercial genre. Thanks!

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[RBenesVO]

Great and unique voice. You can find plenty of need for that gift I’m sure. I listened to Listerine and liked that read especially where you say “See!, you can handle it”. That was where the emotion came out in the read for me.

[Silver Wit]

No notes I can think of. Voice very warm with a dash of wisdom. I could feel the emotion from you in both of your reads.

[LindsayCampbell]

Hello friends!
Been a while since I’ve posted. Just beginning Commercial coaching.
Open to any feedback- thanks in advance!

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[ShellyMadison]

I listened to the first two. I love how bright your tone is. For the Arby’s read, only thing that stood out was “high”. Sounded like a southern lilt crept into it that wouldn’t necessarily be inappropriate for the ad, but contrasted with the rest of your read.

For the Beringer ad, your pace and lower affect are lovely. I can picture the overlay of red wine being poured into a glass. I’d suggest giving more attention to the first time you say “beringer”. It gets lost in the rest of the sentence and being the brand name, and especially being the first time it’s mentioned, it should stand out more

[Silver Wit]

I enjoyed your Tilex read, but I feel like you could’ve added a bit more annoyance or disgust in the beginning. The mildew is GROSS and I think a little emphasis on that would help.

[RBenesVO]

Welcome back. I can hear the training in your read and editing. I listened to the Arby’s and I liked it a lot. I’ll nitpick that Arby’s at the end felt like an afterthought as it was quick and soft. Maybe that’s because I’m envisioning the whole “ARBY’s, WE HAVE THE MEATS!” in my head lol

[RonBroach]

Hi everyone! This is my first post here, so I’m hoping y’all can help me polish what I’ve started. I just had my first lesson with a vocal coach and he suggested I post here for feedback. I look forward to hearing from you.

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[ShellyMadison]

You’ve chosen quite the challenging read vocabulary wise! Your pace is great for this and your tone gives it the gravitas of a professor. Your enunciation, although important, especially for a sample with so much crucial vernacular, is making you sound stilted and robot like. Words like “summarize” and “development”, you’re hitting each of the syllables very hard and often with the same weight, so the word is very clear but unnatural. Seems like a great place to start to familiarize yourself with it, then slowly work in a more conversational and natural affect as you get more comfortable with the material.

[Kamasch]

Hi! Looking for feedback on this commercial clip. I’m focusing on sounding conversational and connected, but felt like I struggled with this one a bit. Any thoughts are appreciated!

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[RBenesVO]

I liked your read. Very clear voice, and pleasant to listen too. The volume was pretty low so I couldn’t listen for any smaller details without pulling it into my DAW. Are you normalizing your file to -3db? That’ll really help it stand out, and in a good way.

[Kamasch]

Thanks for the tip!! These were my first recordings, and I have a bit of a learning curve where the technical aspects are concerned. I’ll try normalizing the file next time.

[latyesemca]

This was so nice to listen to! I will say, the sound was a bit low, so maybe it was the recording, or you were too far away from the mic? Either way, the pacing and infliction was convincing and made me want to hop on the website right then and there!

[cbehrens]

Great read! A thought I had would be to add in more of your perspective — what feeling would you imagine the listener experiencing related to this copy?

[ShellyMadison]

Howdy and hello!
This is my first time posting to the forum. I’m looking for any and all critiques and comments you have. I’m specifically working on my diction, especially endings of words, pace, and that ever important conversational tone. Recorded on phone voice memo app.

Thanks in advance!

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[RBenesVO]

Shelly, welcome to the forum! I’ll list out what I noticed. Volume sounds good, your voice is great, and I liked your drop off with “begins, here.” The others that stood out are a lot of plosives. I’m not sure if you are using a pop filter and/or how close you are to your mic but ~6″ is good and you can kinda talk over, under or to the side of the mic depending on which one you have and whether it’s inverted or not. I can also hear all your breathes distinctly. Sometime breathes are good but you can dial them down in editing for narration purposes so it’s less noticeable. I’m gonna look at your Bayer clip next.

[RBenesVO]

I liked Bayer. You’ve got great diction and pronunciation. The pacing was also really good. The same items like breathes and plosives I mentioned earlier are there but overall I liked this read.

[latyesemca]

Documentary on Jazz sounded really smooth! The pacing for it was stable as well. I will say that the s’s were noticeable in the beginning but toned down throughout. Good job!

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