Feedback Forum
Homepage › Forums › Click here for the Feedback Forum! › Feedback Forum
- This topic has 10,048 replies, 725 voices, and was last updated 4 months ago by
Holly Hoyt.
-
AuthorPosts
-
September 22, 2022 at 6:20 pm #80261
-
September 23, 2022 at 4:33 pm #80270
Silver Wit
ParticipantHere’s my recordings for my 3rd assignment. Any tips and advice are appreciated.
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files. -
September 23, 2022 at 4:34 pm #80275
Silver Wit
ParticipantHere’s my recordings for my 3rd assignment. Any tips and advice are appreciated. (part 2)
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files. -
September 23, 2022 at 4:35 pm #80280
Silver Wit
ParticipantHere’s my recordings for my 3rd assignment. Any tips and advice are appreciated. (part 3)
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files.-
September 24, 2022 at 2:02 pm #80295
ikrani
ParticipantJust took a gander at your ALA read. While your pitch range was kept tight, I think you could’ve stretched it a little more while still keeping a serious tone. You always want to keep your potential audience engaged. Also, there’s a couple spots where your mic caught your intake of breath.
For comparison, I also listened to your Arby’s read. Perhaps it’s because my initial acting “training” came from mimicking Tim Curry’s performances, but I think you really should work on getting comfortable with a broader pitch range when you record. There’s only a subtle difference in overall tone between the two, which may be what you were going for, but I would think a more obvious difference between commercials would demonstrate a better range of usefulness to a potential client.
-
-
September 24, 2022 at 1:48 pm #80292
ikrani
ParticipantMy latest and possibly last round of coach homework. It was only now that I realized I’d spent the last 3 months recording next to a ticking clock. I just didn’t notice until I moved my microphone back about 5 inches and caught some of the ticking in my reads. By then, it was too late: I had everything recorded and the levels all adjusted.
So, if I missed any rogue ticking noises, my apologies.
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files. -
September 24, 2022 at 5:05 pm #80296
madtrammell
ParticipantHello everyone, I have another attempt at narration practice for my upcoming demo record. Any feedback is greatly appreciated, have a great weekend!
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files. -
September 25, 2022 at 4:49 pm #80301
jmacdotorg
ParticipantHello, friends. Time for me to post my second Edge homework assignment. In this dive into the narration script library, I appear to have found a push-back recording from an American Airlines flight circa 1998, and then something from the Neil deGrasse Tyson version of “Cosmos”, if I’m not mistaken. Thank you very much for listening, and for any honest critique offered in reply!
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files.-
September 26, 2022 at 10:22 am #80312
H
ParticipantReally nice reads on both. I liked that your words were clear in both. I would suggest trying a different tone for the American Airlines read from the Cosmos-1 one. The tone you used for the Cosmos-1 sounded really good and I think the American Airlines read gives you more room to raise the energy and change the tone a bit. You can certainly have more fun with the tone/pitch in the American Airlines one. Lastly for both, I think you could pick up the speed of the read a little. Otherwise, very nice!
-
September 27, 2022 at 2:33 pm #80365
raven808
ParticipantThe airlines one is great! Your voice is great for announcements… I think you would be great for the voice over the speakers in theater performances.. the intermission/cell phone/take your seat etc announcements.. or the ones between the Grammys/academy awards. The pause between”directly in front of you” and “in your seat back pocket” could be shortened slightly but otherwise, it’s very clear and well paced!
-
-
September 26, 2022 at 10:13 am #80309
H
ParticipantHi Everyone,
Attached are two homework script reads I’m working on to improve my technique. Feedback is greatly appreciated. Areas I’m trying to improve is tone, pitch, and energy from the reading. Thanks in advance to all!
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files.-
September 26, 2022 at 4:06 pm #80319
Cheechman
ParticipantSounds very echoic, like you’re in a can
Sounds like it’s kind of fake. -
September 26, 2022 at 11:43 pm #80356
slemay
ParticipantI liked the Bowflex and thought your energy was good. I liked the variation you used in the last half of the read when you were explaining instructions. You mixed it up a bit and that felt more natural. Nice job!
-
-
September 26, 2022 at 4:15 pm #80322
annellakaine
ParticipantHi there! Working on my second homework assignment for Narration with a focus on toning down my natural tendency to theatricalize and instead deliver conversational reads. Any feedback greatly appreciated. Thank you!
Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files. -
September 26, 2022 at 4:41 pm #80326
Logan DFD
ParticipantI’d appreciate some feedback on my natural delivery. Which read sounds more natural? Which one fits best?
Balducci’s
Can your food market pass a simple taste test?
At Balducci’s, we put taste first.
This spring, we’re loading up our stores with fresh and chef-crafted foods that are simply bursting with flavor.
Like majestic orange wild king salmon, flown in daily.
And specialties like champagne ham, slow-smoked over hickory chips and glazed with pineapple juice and brown sugar.
Now there’s a store that puts taste first.
Balducci’s.
The food lover’s market.Attachments:
You must be logged in to view attached files.-
September 26, 2022 at 8:02 pm #80331
slemay
ParticipantHi Logan I liked the first one best. I am not an expert but thought that sounded more natural. Only feedback is maybe less pronunciation on the word taste. Nice job!
-
September 27, 2022 at 2:29 pm #80364
raven808
ParticipantI liked the third one as far as it sounding natural! Great job making 3 different takes!
-
-
AuthorPosts
- You must be logged in to reply to this topic.