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Hello Forum Friends. I am narrowing down samples for an upcoming narration demo. I would appreciate a n y input – no need to sugar coat! I am eager for ideas on how to improve, what lands funny, awkward, forced or unnatural and basically, if I am conveying a story with the ever-important “conversational” tone. Thank you so so much!
And one other thing, the energy should be increasing slightly with each read (“Guns Germs and Steel” being the most mild of the three, “Bonobos” with a bit ore energy and “Sun” with the most of the three but still somewhat mild.)
Thank YOU!
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Hey M. I’ve listened to your recordings and I really like the careful tone you placed within them. I can’t speak to narration as my focus is on commercial, but I noticed the slight increases in energy you mentioned and I think they work wonderfully. They’re apparent enough for the listener, but subtle enough to avoid drastically changing the consistency and tempo of your reads. Awesome job!
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Hi Artist7,
I love your energy in the Food Network recording. Your voice is smooth, fluid and clear with nice tone. I would add more energy to the NPR recording, especially toward the end. Both are very well done! -Veronica -
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Hi Edge Studio Friends,
Attached are two reads for my VO homework:-)…a medical narration and a narration. Would love to hear your thoughts. Thank you!
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Your reads sound great, your voice sounds like it was meant to do these scripts. My only critique is that it does sound like you may be a bit too close to your mic? I’m hearing plosives and a bit of mouth noise. Your pace is spot on, not too fast and not too slow. Overall great read
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Hi Michele – This is a longggggggggggg overdue thank you for your kind and motivating words. You were spot on with your assessment regarding “performing.” In fact, I had my coaching session the next day and was reminded about sounding conversational. I’m a work in progress:)! I’m getting ready now for my next coaching session now.
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Hi – Autism – Friendly tone, good pacing and inflection – nicely done! Just a couple of thoughts – “To learn the signs…” and “Brought to you by…” seem a little less conversational than the rest of the copy. There’s a poppin’ “P” in the first mention of “parent.” Orange Theory – Like your friendly voice! Consider editing out the breath before “Do you want …” and the “c” in “confidence” is noisy, maybe you’re too close to the mic? Think about emphasizing “you” in “do you want more” “Orange Theory Fitness” and “we and you” in “we give you more. ” Volume is low in both reads. Looking forward to your next posts.
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Hey everyone. Back again with another round of recordings before my next coaching session. If you’ve listened to my recordings before and noticed that my voice is a bit off this time, I think it’s because I overdid my warmups and I feel as if it spilled onto my performance, so I apologize in advance if these aren’t up to par. Thank you in advance for your feedback.
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I’m working on tracks for my narration demo. I’d greatly appreciate you listening to these two reads and giving me some feedback. The first is “for lack of a better description” a dramatic read and the second is an elearning read.
Do they sound conversational/natural? Is there vocal variety?
Thanks in advance!
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Hi – Great vocal variety on these! Alamo – “Road to the Sky” gets a bit mushed together. Coyote – Probably just me, I was a bit disturbed by the copy. I couldn’t really get past the fact that a coyote got shot in NYC. Is it supposed to be a dream sequence? Justin Boots – My favorite. Great use of your voice – pacing, inflection, etc.
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Hi BJ
The coyote was shot down in Central Park with a tranquilizer gun and taken to the zoo until he could be released back into the wild. No animals were harmed during the making of this commercial for the Bronx Zoo. Every American, including coyotes, should visit NYC at least once in their lifetime. Thanks for listening and your comments.
BillH
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